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gphett
Joined: 26 Jun 2011 Posts: 2 Location: Simla, CO
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 3:46 pm Post subject: Would like to get some feed back on my Demo please. |
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http://voiceoversbygary.com/
I would love some good feedback |
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Mandy Nelson MMD

Joined: 07 Aug 2008 Posts: 2914 Location: Wicked Mainah
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 5:46 pm Post subject: |
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Wow! A great cowboy voice!
Here's my opinion, which is just that, opinion:
TOO FAST. The first part is way too fast. You are a slow, easy going, laid back cowboy with a voice that matches that. But if you speed it up this much then no one can understand. The copy and read should match your great voice - slow, deliberate, honest and pure.
Second, your voice sounds mostly the same in every part of your demo. You should change up your tone enough to make it feel real. You need a little more diversity in you reads to make it a great reel.
Your voice is great, just keep working it! _________________ 006 member of the Sisterhood of the Traveling Mic. Bonded by sound.
Manfillappsoc: The Mandy and Philip mutual appreciation Society. Who's in your network?
Have you seen my mic closet? ~ me to my future husband |
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Shock Contributor II

Joined: 14 Jul 2011 Posts: 52 Location: Near Gettysburg, PA
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 7:21 pm Post subject: |
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I agree with Mandy - I think slowing down will help bring out that natural timbre in your voice more (GREAT Cowboy/Country-Western delivery).
Right now I'm helping a buddy in DC (he does shows on XM) to slow the heck down - he has the "three round burst" delivery syndrome, and while you don't have the *bursties* thank heavens, one of the exercises I've given him may help you (it helped me years ago, and I got it from an old VO God - Stan Watt):
Practice reading everything VERY V E R Y slowly, until it HURTS. Enunciate ev-ery word to a rid-ic-ulous de-gree, and do that for half an hour every day for a few weeks - and dig deep too; exaggerate that bass timbre until it rattles the dishes!
While you won't wind up sounding like John Wayne on quaaludes (hopefully), you will be developing a different *color* of delivery to add to your pallette.
In the end, think: campfire - harmonica - horses whinnying - some varmint roasting on a spit over the flame
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Scott Pollak The Gates of Troy

Joined: 01 Jun 2010 Posts: 1903 Location: Looking out at the San Juan mountains
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 6:25 am Post subject: |
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Yup, what they said.
Honestly, I couldn't tell when one spot ended and the next began. EVERYTHING is at exactly the same pitch, energy level, etc.
If a client wants that one, singular style you have, then you're in. But if they're looking for anything even 1 degree outside of that, I'm not sure they'll be convinced you can do anything other than that one type of delivery.
I'm betting you can, but you need to make yourself stretch a bit. What you have sounds okay, although a bit 'read' as opposed to story-telling it. Now let's hear what else ya got! _________________ Scott R. Pollak
Clients include Pandora, NPR Atlanta, Wells Fargo, Cisco, Humana, Publix, UPS, AT&T, HP, Xerox and more.
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DougVox The Gates of Troy

Joined: 10 Jan 2007 Posts: 1706 Location: Miami
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 7:42 am Post subject: |
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Hi Gary,
Question: Why do you have links to V123, Bodalgo.com and UVT.com on your site?
Quickie: "The voice your looking for" should be "you're." _________________ Doug Turkel (tur-KELL)
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Scott Pollak The Gates of Troy

Joined: 01 Jun 2010 Posts: 1903 Location: Looking out at the San Juan mountains
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 9:11 am Post subject: |
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DougVox wrote: |
Question: Why do you have links to V123, Bodalgo.com and UVT.com on your site?
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Yeah, I always wonder when I see that, too, Doug. I know that V123 says they'll reciprocate and link to YOUR site, but so what? I don't want someone who is visiting MY site, listening to MY voice, to head off to online sites where thousands of my competitors are. _________________ Scott R. Pollak
Clients include Pandora, NPR Atlanta, Wells Fargo, Cisco, Humana, Publix, UPS, AT&T, HP, Xerox and more.
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gphett
Joined: 26 Jun 2011 Posts: 2 Location: Simla, CO
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 5:00 pm Post subject: |
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DougVox wrote: | Hi Gary,
Question: Why do you have links to V123, Bodalgo.com and UVT.com on your site?
Quickie: "The voice your looking for" should be "you're." |
Fixed the You're thank you very much. I have noticed that the more scripts I read that I am getting more comfortable and having a lot more inflection in my voice. I will practice slowing down.
I removed the links also. The reason I did was for the purpose of search engine ranking. The more links you have recipocated the better the ranking you should get. Unless it has changed. |
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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 6:00 pm Post subject: |
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If you're doing links for ranking, keep 'em off your index page.
The most important thing for ANY WEBSITE is it title.
And have a good, concise description at DMOZ.org. _________________ DBCooperVO.com
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