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asnively Triple G

Joined: 17 Jun 2006 Posts: 3204 Location: Los Angeles
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Posted: Sun Jul 18, 2010 8:48 pm Post subject: This commercial demo is done. Right? |
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I want to send this off to Dan O'Day in the morning. I tried to incorporate everyone's extremely helpful suggestions, and I took a very-needed break from it so I could come back to it with fresher ears. You know the drill... Can you check it for some glaring misstep that I've failed to avoid? I'm a little sleep deprived from being Faffy's b*tch.
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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Posted: Sun Jul 18, 2010 10:23 pm Post subject: |
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IKEA!!!!
I especially love the opening element with the favorite pair of pants!
I love your sound just bunches. You are totally trustworthy, fun, believable, joyful and a leader I want to follow when I listen.
About the flow of things—I would consider changing up the order a bit.
After Pants, go to the Baby Animals game spot or the Ford Edge spot. The snippet right after the Pants spot seems to be in the same vocal range as the pants spot.
Also‚ see if you can keep your major department stores from showing up back-to-back.
That's my immediate impression after 2 listens!!! _________________ DBCooperVO.com
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Philip Banks Je Ne Sais Quoi

Joined: 20 Jun 2005 Posts: 11074 Location: Portgordon, Scotland
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 12:52 am Post subject: |
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If you REALLY want a demo critique I'll write one, but you don't. You want a demo to (a) get you work and (b) possibly open the door to an agent. The demo I've heard will do both. |
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Bruce Boardmeister

Joined: 06 Jun 2005 Posts: 7977 Location: Portland, OR
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 4:52 am Post subject: |
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There comes a time in the course of human events when you just have to set it and forget it. It's fine. Ship it.
B _________________ VO-BB Member #31 Enlisted June, 2005
I'm not a Zoo, but over the years I've played one on radio/TV. . |
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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 7:59 am Post subject: |
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OK, OK, I was being hyper picky. _________________ DBCooperVO.com
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asnively Triple G

Joined: 17 Jun 2006 Posts: 3204 Location: Los Angeles
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:33 am Post subject: |
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I think you're right, Connie. I hear it now. I was just too close to it to hear the similarity. I'm fixing it now, and then I'm following the rest of y'all's good advice and calling this bread baked.
Thank you!  _________________ the Amy Snively family of brands for all your branded thing needs.
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todd ellis A Zillion

Joined: 02 Jan 2007 Posts: 10528 Location: little egypt
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:35 am Post subject: |
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mmmmmm, bread! _________________ "i know philip banks": todd ellis
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bobsouer Frequent Flyer

Joined: 15 Jul 2006 Posts: 9883 Location: Pittsburgh, PA
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:49 am Post subject: |
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What Todd said! _________________ Be well,
Bob Souer (just think of lemons)
The second nicest guy in voiceover.
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asnively Triple G

Joined: 17 Jun 2006 Posts: 3204 Location: Los Angeles
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 4:44 pm Post subject: |
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OMG! I was not kidding about being sleep-deprived! I called Deirdre "Connie"! LOLZ111!11!
And, somehow, I was so focused on the order changes that DB was suggesting, that I overlooked her very kind words. So, thank you and sorry and etc.!
I have Doesn't Process Compliments Well syndrome. Lame.
Anyway, thank yous and fresh bread all around!  _________________ the Amy Snively family of brands for all your branded thing needs.
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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 5:29 pm Post subject: |
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We'll have to get together and have a taco once you can come up for air.
Love,
Connie _________________ DBCooperVO.com
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roger King's Row

Joined: 30 May 2007 Posts: 1064 Location: Central Kentucky
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Mandy Nelson MMD

Joined: 07 Aug 2008 Posts: 2914 Location: Wicked Mainah
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Posted: Mon Jul 26, 2010 11:43 am Post subject: |
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I love it, and your sound. Rock on! _________________ 006 member of the Sisterhood of the Traveling Mic. Bonded by sound.
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Diane Maggipinto Spreading Snark Worldwide

Joined: 03 Mar 2006 Posts: 6679 Location: saul lay seetee youtee
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Posted: Mon Jul 26, 2010 1:36 pm Post subject: |
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who's connie? _________________ sitting at #8, though not as present as I'd like to be. Hello!
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asnively Triple G

Joined: 17 Jun 2006 Posts: 3204 Location: Los Angeles
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Posted: Mon Jul 26, 2010 4:59 pm Post subject: |
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Connie is my pet name for Deirdre.
Apparently.
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Philip Banks Je Ne Sais Quoi

Joined: 20 Jun 2005 Posts: 11074 Location: Portgordon, Scotland
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Posted: Tue Jul 27, 2010 12:34 am Post subject: |
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Some feedback for you.
Positive. Exllnt ebayer 4* wud use agn. |
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