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Jason Smith · Joined: 10 Jul 2014 Posts: 12 Location: Noblesville, IN

So due to the fact that I'm am very new to the industry I'd like all the constructive criticism that I can get. Below are links to my first 2 attempts at commercial demo reel clips. Let me know what you think.

https://soundcloud.com/jason-smith-voice/711-commercial-demo

https://soundcloud.com/jason-smith-voice/scotts-surf-shop-commercial-demo

Jeffrey Kafer · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:40 am Post subject:

The first one seems to be your style. Work with that one. The second one should be scrapped. The dudebro attempt sounds forced.
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Bailey · Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2014 11:46 am Post subject:

What Jeff said.

1st... very easy on the ears, comfortable, relaxed, believable.

2nd... too much forced accent, dictation hard to understand.
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Jason Smith · Joined: 10 Jul 2014 Posts: 12 Location: Noblesville, IN

Thank you very much for the advice. Were the levels on the music versus the voice ok or do I need to lower the music's volume?

Bruce · Posted: Mon Jul 14, 2014 8:24 am Post subject:

Yes, I'd lower the music volume a bit. The music should always be secondary unless that's what you're selling, i.e. concert commercials.

I agree that the first read style should be in your quiver, although I thought the opening first few words were a bit mush-mouthed. Be relaxed and natural when doing that kind of read, but also be understandable.

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