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melissa eX
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 04, 2015 10:35 am    Post subject: Corporate Demo Reply with quote

Hey guys!

I've been updating my non-broadcast / corporate demo with some recent work I found and I got it down to 2:17 (the demo on my website now is almost 3!) and now I'm too close to it to figure out what to take out. All of my demos live on Voicezam, so listeners can skip around - so I'm not worried about the length when accessed from my website. But for those who request mp3's, I'm thinking - even though corporate demos can be longer than :60 - it should be shorter than 2:17.

If anyone has suggestions I'd appreciate the help - Thanks!

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 04, 2015 11:31 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Open with "One World Trade Center the best business address in the world" and then put 2.15 of tone because the buying decision will have been made by the time you get to "...the best business"

People need to hear you make the most important thing ever sound like it is the most important ever without even blinking. In the above sentence you do it brilliantly.

Your "performance statement" should always be - " Over emphasis is over rated. I'll be quietly confident for you "
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Mike Harrison
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 05, 2015 4:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Philip nailed it, of course.

But, if you do want to feature others, one track I would NOT include is the one I believe is about Calgary, as I found the music fighting you and very distracting. And, if on first listen (as prospects would) I heard two tracks for software (or other form of business solutions) with very similar reads, I would also consider dropping one of them.

But color me HUGELY impressed! Your work is simply brilliant.
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melissa eX
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 08, 2015 4:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks Philip -thanks Mike!

I love that performance statement Philip - I'm going to use it! I also re-edited - I think you're right - well not about the silence but I did start with 1WTC.

Mike, thanks for your help. I used the other part of that video - that you helped me out with.

Here's what it sounds like now. Just under 2:00 - could probably lose some more but I think this is an improvement.

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 31, 2015 11:37 pm    Post subject: eXcellent Reply with quote

New version sounds eXcellent !
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 29, 2015 2:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

"Your "performance statement" should always be - " Over emphasis is over rated. I'll be quietly confident for you "

That's a gem right there from Phillip. Saving that.
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Fran McClellan
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 01, 2015 3:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sounds great, Melissa! If you wanted to shorten it up a bit, you could always trim the second piece. It's a great piece, but it sticks out due to it's length (IMHO).
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 06, 2015 8:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

All sound good, but I think that the opening read sounds like your most dramatized and, as such, perhaps the furthest from the "real you" - unless you are dark and mysterious by nature of course.

I am not suggesting cutting it but might go more with the trademark you on the front.

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