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melissa eX MMD
Joined: 20 Oct 2007 Posts: 2793 Location: Lower Manhattan, New Amsterdam, the original NYC
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2015 10:35 am Post subject: Corporate Demo |
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Hey guys!
I've been updating my non-broadcast / corporate demo with some recent work I found and I got it down to 2:17 (the demo on my website now is almost 3!) and now I'm too close to it to figure out what to take out. All of my demos live on Voicezam, so listeners can skip around - so I'm not worried about the length when accessed from my website. But for those who request mp3's, I'm thinking - even though corporate demos can be longer than :60 - it should be shorter than 2:17.
If anyone has suggestions I'd appreciate the help - Thanks!
Corporate Demo _________________ www.melissaeXelberth.com
from crime...to the divine(R)
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Philip Banks Je Ne Sais Quoi
Joined: 20 Jun 2005 Posts: 11049 Location: Portgordon, Scotland
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2015 11:31 am Post subject: |
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Open with "One World Trade Center the best business address in the world" and then put 2.15 of tone because the buying decision will have been made by the time you get to "...the best business"
People need to hear you make the most important thing ever sound like it is the most important ever without even blinking. In the above sentence you do it brilliantly.
Your "performance statement" should always be - " Over emphasis is over rated. I'll be quietly confident for you " |
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Mike Harrison M&M
Joined: 03 Nov 2007 Posts: 2029 Location: Equidistant from New York City and Philadelphia, along the NJ Shore
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2015 4:09 am Post subject: |
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Philip nailed it, of course.
But, if you do want to feature others, one track I would NOT include is the one I believe is about Calgary, as I found the music fighting you and very distracting. And, if on first listen (as prospects would) I heard two tracks for software (or other form of business solutions) with very similar reads, I would also consider dropping one of them.
But color me HUGELY impressed! Your work is simply brilliant. _________________ Mike
Male Voice Over Talent
I have taken leave of my sensors.
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melissa eX MMD
Joined: 20 Oct 2007 Posts: 2793 Location: Lower Manhattan, New Amsterdam, the original NYC
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Posted: Wed Jul 08, 2015 4:59 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks Philip -thanks Mike!
I love that performance statement Philip - I'm going to use it! I also re-edited - I think you're right - well not about the silence but I did start with 1WTC.
Mike, thanks for your help. I used the other part of that video - that you helped me out with.
Here's what it sounds like now. Just under 2:00 - could probably lose some more but I think this is an improvement.
Corporate _________________ www.melissaeXelberth.com
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FinMac Lucky 700
Joined: 14 Jan 2013 Posts: 705 Location: In a really cool place...Finland!
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Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2015 11:37 pm Post subject: eXcellent |
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New version sounds eXcellent ! _________________ www.scottsvoiceover.com - An American voice in Finland
"If you want to get to the top, you have to get off your bottom". (Unknown) |
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Quicksilver Been Here Awhile
Joined: 29 Oct 2012 Posts: 217
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Posted: Thu Oct 29, 2015 2:17 pm Post subject: |
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"Your "performance statement" should always be - " Over emphasis is over rated. I'll be quietly confident for you "
That's a gem right there from Phillip. Saving that. |
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Fran McClellan The Thirteenth Floor
Joined: 15 Feb 2010 Posts: 1312 Location: Middle of Nowhere, PA
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Posted: Sun Nov 01, 2015 3:19 pm Post subject: |
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Sounds great, Melissa! If you wanted to shorten it up a bit, you could always trim the second piece. It's a great piece, but it sticks out due to it's length (IMHO). _________________ Back into the murky lurk from whence I came
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"Life is what happens to you while you're busy making other plans." - John Lennon |
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VoiceoverMike
Joined: 06 May 2013 Posts: 4 Location: Bedford, Texas
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Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2015 8:45 pm Post subject: |
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All sound good, but I think that the opening read sounds like your most dramatized and, as such, perhaps the furthest from the "real you" - unless you are dark and mysterious by nature of course.
I am not suggesting cutting it but might go more with the trademark you on the front.
Mike Norgaard
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