VO-BB - 20 YEARS OLD!

[Mike Patrick]

Good Morning..(it's 10:42 am Phoenix time)....

Might I get your thoughts on the demo's I have posted at my website

http://www.mikepatrickvo.com

Instead of posting them individually, I thought this would be a better way to access. Thanks in advance.

Mike

[Jeffrey Kafer]

Here's what I heard on your commercial demo:

1) Way too long. Keep the entire thing to :60 or :75 tops
2) .... which means the individual spots were also too long.
3) I'm hearing a sense of sameness in the spots. They all have the same sort of delivery. Do you have anything to show more variety?
4) I'm hearing your "radio" voice in all of your reads. They don't sound natural and they seem to lack emotion. It's almost like you're trying too hard to have a "good" voice and not focusing on bringing out the necessary natural emoition.

Does that help at all?
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Jeff
http://JeffreyKafer.com
Voice-overload Web comic: http://voice-overload.com

[Mike Patrick]

Certainly appreciate your feedback. Thank you.

[louzucaro]

I know what Jeff is saying...I think the tone of your voice is really nice, but at one end of your vocal spectrum, your voice gets really grainy (there's another word for it but I'm blanking on it for some reason). Super awesome for some reads but maybe too intimidating for others, so I would probably watch that most of all.

If it's a sensitive subject that needs warmth, I would try to stay away from the grainy part more.

The sameness Jeff mentioned, I don't know if this is what he meant, but I notice you draw out the ends of a lot of your sentences and use the same inflections on them. Again, seems like that would work really well for some reads but definitely not all of them.

Again, though, nice vocal tone...I don't have much experience with radio imaging, but I thought the sound of that one was pretty darn nice.
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Lou Zucaro
http://www.voicehero.com

"Well, yeah, there's my favorite leaf!"

[Hart]

I think your radio one has killer production values. Did you do it yourself?

You've got a great voice and it's obvious you either are getting work or you should be. I'm assuming from your sound you've got a radio background (me too).

On the radio demo: It's got a certain sameness to it too. All the pieces are very good but they end up blurring in my mind. That's your money voice obviously and I get it, I like it. But I'd suggest either putting a few pieces in the middle to show some versatility or shorten it up a good bit. You know 's. They have short attention spans. Kinda the same thing on some of the effects. I'm hearing the BIG voice effect too many times. Show me you've got it nailed, and then show me a different sound.

Hope that helps, I like your radio demo way better than mine, ha ha.

Welcome to the VO-BB.
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Brian Hart Productions

[Rob Ellis]

Mike,

I can understand what the others are saying about maybe showing a little more range, but....

......these sound to me like demos that showcase your money voice for the most part, and I see nothing wrong with that. Especially with the promos and trailer demos.

Maybe a little more range with the commercial demo, but as it is it would still get you work IMHO. One suggestion though, the "Giant" spot, while compelling, probably needs to be shorter.

From where I sit, yeah, there's always going to be a little room for improvement, but you obviously know what you're doing.

[Hart]

I agree. Obviously. I'm quite sure I've heard your voice somewhere before.
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Brian Hart Productions

[Mike Patrick]

I thank you all for your thoughts and suggestions.

Mike

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