VO-BB - 20 YEARS OLD!

melissa eX · Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 7:46 pm Post subject: Which version do you like better?

I messed with my new commercial demo - just a little bit.

Which do you like better? Original or Revised?

Original

Revised

Thanks!

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CarynClark · Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 6:07 am Post subject:

Here's my two cents... you can give me change back if you want! Really though, there are people way more qualified than I to comment on this.

I like the second one best. I will say, I would keep it at a minute, minute fifteen max. I would remove the shorter clips... it's (for me) too difficult to ascertain what you can sound like in a short clip of a few words. I think it's more a distraction to the listener.

I like the Haagen Daaz spot at the end, too. I'd use more of it, and move it up. Also, the child actor spot really sounds more like a promo than a commercial. Oh, and I like the washer and dryer spot too. And the faucet spot... I'd make both a little longer.

Nice work Melissa!!!! Good stuff here!
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melissa eX · Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 4:09 pm Post subject:

Thanks Caryn! Sorry I haven't responded before this. wow, you're the only one who posted - ouch - lol!

I think I'm liking the 2nd one too.

donrandall · Guest

Melissa,

I spent about an hour putting a note together with some critique.

Upon trying to post the completed note, I was greeted by a pop up that told me I would have to sign in again. I did so. The note was lost.

I am sorry. I tried.

melissa eX · Posted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 10:07 pm Post subject:

omg, Don - I didn't expect anyone to spend that much time with this! Thank you! Don't you hate it when your post times out? That's happened numerous times with me. I've learned to copy it before I do anything else!

Thanks again for all the time you put into this!