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BrandonVO Guest
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2020 8:56 am Post subject: Please Critique my commercial demo |
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https://voca.ro/eRCeREnZ8wY
Comprises a compilation of commercials.
1.30 minutes in length.
I havent mixed it with music or any sound effects, so as to bring out my voice as best as possible.
Looking forward to your feedback! |
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Bob Bergen CM
Joined: 22 Apr 2008 Posts: 945
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2020 9:31 am Post subject: |
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If this is for a market outside the US, then it should be critiqued by someone in that market. This demo might be perfect for your market. But for the US, it would not be considered a competitive demo. It lacks production. A demo needs to not just reflect the talent's skills, but also how they fit into the commercial landscape. So again, this might fit in perfectly in your market. But for here, each spot needs to sound broadcast real, representing and demonstrating today's commercial landscape. |
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todd ellis A Zillion
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Joined: 02 Jan 2007 Posts: 10494 Location: little egypt
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2020 9:50 am Post subject: |
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hi brandon - welcome back to the vo-bb! you are much improved from your last visit - kudos on that! but you're still not quite there. my critique is really with mic technique and your recording environment. lots of sibilance (that ssss sound) and harsh consonants. i think backing off the mic will help with this. the whole mix seems quite "bright" to me --- but not in a good way. oh - and there is a giant "clunk" at :05 seconds.
that said - if i got a demo with your style of read - very clean - from a better recording environment and some practice on where to be on the mic ... i could use it (in short bursts) in eLearning modules calling for an accented-american/sri lankan character. those roles are rare - but the DO occur.
so ... keep working on it - and keep posting updates. _________________ "i know philip banks": todd ellis
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Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2020 11:13 am Post subject: |
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I have little to add to the previous thoughts.
You have improved - that is evident. But more needs to be done.
Keep up the good challenge You are getting there.
F2 _________________ Be thankful for the bad things in life. They opened your eyes to the good things you weren't paying attention to before. email: thevoice@usa.com |
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BrandonVO Guest
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2021 10:10 am Post subject: |
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Thanks guys! I know this is a bit of a late reply, but I was studying up on the arts and crafts of voice acting, based on all of your feedback. Right now Im brushing up on my stanislavinsky to help me further this goal. |
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