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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 10:21 am Post subject: Dear Copy Writer |
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Dear Copy Writer,
Those helpful numbers on the side of the idiotic template you insist on using aren't gentle suggestions or decoration, they're there to help you STOP WRITING TOO MUCH. Your Template clearly shows 10 lines as the cutoff for a 30-second spot. Your copy is 12 lines INCLUDING A NUMERICAL PHONE NUMBER.
No, I can't just read it faster.
Love,
Deebs _________________ DBCooperVO.com
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Kristin Lennox Flight Attendant

Joined: 30 Apr 2011 Posts: 858
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 10:38 am Post subject: |
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Where's the "like" button...?
We are not auctioneers. _________________ Always look on the bright side of life.
Dee doo. Dee doot doot doo dee doo.
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Lee Gordon A Zillion

Joined: 25 Jul 2008 Posts: 6864 Location: West Hartford, CT
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Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2011 12:23 pm Post subject: |
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Just reduce the type size from 12 point to 10. That ought to fix it.  _________________ Lee Gordon, O.A.V.
Voice President of the United States
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Twitter: @LeeGordonVoice
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dwpthe3rd Contributore Level V

Joined: 28 Feb 2010 Posts: 199 Location: Where palm trees meet pines
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 8:15 am Post subject: |
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Lee Gordon wrote: | Just reduce the type size from 12 point to 10. That ought to fix it.  |
THAT, sir, sad but true, is the funniest thing I've read in quite some time. _________________ If attacked by a mob of clowns go for the juggler.
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jasbart Been Here Awhile

Joined: 26 Sep 2006 Posts: 293 Location: Gilbertsville, KY
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Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2011 7:35 pm Post subject: |
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I remember once receiving a narration script that was printed out in 8pt (!!!) with margins that were no larger than 1/2 inch. The funny thing was that we hadn't discussed price yet...I guess the client was preparing to offer a "by the page" rate.
Jim _________________ Jim Barton
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Lee Gordon A Zillion

Joined: 25 Jul 2008 Posts: 6864 Location: West Hartford, CT
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 1:30 am Post subject: |
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dwpthe3rd wrote: | funniest thing I've read in quite some time. |
I wish I could take credit for this wacky, humorous concept but, unfortunately, it is merely an observation based upon years of experience dealing with idiot radio station sales people whose duties include writing their own commercial copy. Having been a copywriter myself, I understand that this job is difficult enough, even for those of us who are literate. _________________ Lee Gordon, O.A.V.
Voice President of the United States
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Bruce Boardmeister

Joined: 06 Jun 2005 Posts: 7978 Location: Portland, OR
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 8:26 am Post subject: |
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I'm sure it's because I'm a voiceoverist, but I keep a general eye on the "word count" number at the bottom of the page as I write. When I'm finished with the first draft I hone it down to about 200 words for a minute of short-worded peppy copy and down to about 160 for a minute of normal speak. And that means 80 words is your ballpark for 30 second spots, oh you writer-only writers. If there's any doubt, out comes the stopwatch and an honest read speed.
But this is a VO site not a copywriters site, so they'll never know, will they? Sigh.
B _________________ VO-BB Member #31 Enlisted June, 2005
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Charles Nove Contributor III

Joined: 26 Jan 2007 Posts: 98 Location: London, England
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Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2011 9:53 pm Post subject: Re: Dear Copy Writer |
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Deirdre wrote: | Your copy is 12 lines INCLUDING A NUMERICAL PHONE NUMBER. | Amazing how few writers seem to "get" that, while 020 7434 4404 might look like three words when laid out on the page, it becomes eleven words when you say it. Or, indeed, that www (yes, we're still beset by people who feel it necessary to preface website addresses thus) is effectively three words. Or that the commas in a list have a small, but significant, timing impact.
In fact ..... nobody understands !!!  _________________ Charles Nove
Scottish voice-artist, to the world ... and beyond!
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Lee Gordon A Zillion

Joined: 25 Jul 2008 Posts: 6864 Location: West Hartford, CT
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 1:01 am Post subject: |
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THREE words?!? It's one phone number; most of these knuckleheads regard it as one word.
"WWW" isn't just three words. It's three multisyllabic words (but don't ask them what that means.
And (channeling one of these dimwits) what is this "comma" of which you speak?  _________________ Lee Gordon, O.A.V.
Voice President of the United States
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Moe Egan 4 Large

Joined: 11 Sep 2006 Posts: 4339 Location: Live Free or Die
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 5:51 am Post subject: |
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I am loving this thread, but having one problem with it- I don't know if I should laugh or cry. Such truth is spoken here....'Go faster but make it sound slower- you can do it'. Sure. No Prob. Just make sure the check don't bounce. _________________ Moe Egan
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Bruce Boardmeister

Joined: 06 Jun 2005 Posts: 7978 Location: Portland, OR
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 6:46 am Post subject: |
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Maybe one of our web gurus will come across this and have an answer: Do you still need to say or advertise the WWW in a web address? I know in the earlier days of Internet it was important to make it part of the URL you entered, but today? I've often convinced clients to drop the WWW as an unnecessary appendage.
B _________________ VO-BB Member #31 Enlisted June, 2005
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asnively Triple G

Joined: 17 Jun 2006 Posts: 3204 Location: Los Angeles
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 7:56 am Post subject: |
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There is no reason at all to say www anymore.
Is there something we can do about all those people who are saying "dot-com-backslash-special-word"? It's not a back slash; it's a forward slash and should be read "slash." (This is a backslash: \)
Drives. me. mad. _________________ the Amy Snively family of brands for all your branded thing needs.
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Deirdre Czarina Emeritus

Joined: 10 Nov 2004 Posts: 13023 Location: Camp Cooper
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Lizden A Zillion

Joined: 04 Dec 2006 Posts: 8864 Location: The dark recesses of my mind
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Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 2:48 pm Post subject: |
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asnively wrote: | Is there something we can do about all those people who are saying "dot-com-backslash-special-word"? It's not a back slash; it's a forward slash and should be read "slash." (This is a backslash: \)
Drives. me. mad. |
OMG, Amy! Me too!
Drives me NUTS!  _________________ Liz de Nesnera O.A.V. ~ Livin' The VO Dream!
English/French Bilingual VO w/ ISDN
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