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JackB Contributor
Joined: 11 Feb 2012 Posts: 28 Location: Chicago, IL
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Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2012 10:41 am Post subject: My New Commercial Demo, Just Give it to Me Straight... |
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Let me have it, y'all...
http://www.voices.com/demos/jackburr _________________ - Jack |
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Lance Blair M&M

Joined: 03 Jun 2007 Posts: 2281 Location: Atlanta
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Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2012 11:17 am Post subject: |
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Your voice is nice, but I stopped listening on the big click on 'technology'. That has to go.
Good luck!
Edit: I agree with Bob that it's a sfx click of a mouse...but since it comes right at the end of the 'n' in technology, my concern is that some might think it's a sinus click or that it's at least distracting.
OK - now that I've listened to it all, I like what you can do. You can sell ideas. You get it. You're authentic and intelligent. So, now my issue is the negative energy of the Don't Call Me/Howdy Neighbor clips - because those guys aren't all that smart, like you clearly are. _________________ Skype: globalvoiceover
and now, http://lanceblairvo.com the blog is there now too!
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Bob Bergen CM
Joined: 22 Apr 2008 Posts: 981
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Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2012 1:43 pm Post subject: |
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As I told you in my email Jack, I like it. That click didn't bother me worth a darn. From my perspective, it could have been an on camera spot showing someone clicking at the computer. Did not get in the way of your read whatsoever.
Now, here's the problem with demos. You ask 20 different people to critique it and you will get 20 different ideas to make it better. Do you have an agent? If so, do they like it? Have you played it for commercial casting directors and ad people? They are the ones who need to like it more than us fellow actors.  |
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JackB Contributor
Joined: 11 Feb 2012 Posts: 28 Location: Chicago, IL
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Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2012 3:59 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks guys! Don't worry, I'm acquainting myself with many important people in my market (Chicago). And as a pro musician/singer, I've gotten used to hearing criticisms from the entire spectrum. It's weird, but it's how I learn now. _________________ - Jack |
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Bruce Boardmeister

Joined: 06 Jun 2005 Posts: 7977 Location: Portland, OR
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Posted: Thu Aug 30, 2012 4:58 pm Post subject: |
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Overall, good work. Two nitpicky things from my view, the diction was a little garbled in places on the second spot (it's a motor mouth spot but even those need to be clear), and I wouldn't have included the screaming bit on the phone...it's a fairly negative thing to me.
Sounds like you've got a plan to get comments from the folks who really matter, agents and agencies....excellent.
B _________________ VO-BB Member #31 Enlisted June, 2005
I'm not a Zoo, but over the years I've played one on radio/TV. . |
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