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WillMWatt
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2014 1:56 pm    Post subject: Radio/Commercial Demo Reply with quote

Hi there Guys and Gals

I've just rustled up this little reel. I'd love to hear what you think!

https://soundcloud.com/will-m-watt/radiocommercial-demo-reel

Cheers

Will
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Bob Bergen
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2014 3:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Boy, I think Mr. Banks is the best qualified judge here. Personally I don't know a thing about the British market. I can comment based on the US, but it might be off base. But here goes. Your demo has at least 10 seconds of wasted music. It's a vo demo, not a music demo. Don't take up valuable demo real estate with music, fading, etc. Also, in my market you don't cross pollinate genres. You attached an imaging spot at the end. Again, this might be the norm in England. But I think it's best to market per genre rather than offer a taste of several. Your read is nice. But even there I bow to the wisdom of Mr. Banks.
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WillMWatt
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2014 3:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks, Bob. Yeah - listening back, I can hear a lot of empty space that could do with fixing. I was unsure whether or not to put the imaging bit in, but think I should remove it - I already hesitated by putting it at the end. Helpful advice, thank you. Smile
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WillMWatt
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 18, 2014 4:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hiya all. Alrighty, I've tightened up from the original and have re-uploaded to the same URL. Certainly still keen to hear your thoughts.
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ConnieTerwilliger
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 18, 2014 10:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

From a purely "put your most 'you' foot forward" approach, I would start with the last clip as that is the most "you" in tone and pace I would imagine. The first cut seems sweeter and slower than most of the material you would be asked to do. Then rearranged form there to keep interest up...
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DGates
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2014 2:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ditto what Connie said.
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Philip Banks
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2014 3:55 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

What's been created on the demo could be fine tuned to get what a director needed were any of the reads taken from paid sessions.

A song is about words and music. You are trying to master several tunes but do not know the words. Listen to what you have done and when you hear you'll change things. It's not bad, far from it but it is clear to me that you can do so much better.

Here's how it works

Real person - I'm reading this
Ad voice - I AM reading THIS
Imaging voice - I.........AM ...........RRRRRRRRRRRRRRRReading ...THIS!
Actor - "Now, wait. You want me to just look like I'm reading this? Should I say this? Who am I saying this to? Can I get a line read it?
V123 audtion - "Hi this is T Billy-Bob Ashton of WeiserNumber1voice.com. Thank you for the honor and privilege of being able to supply you with this audition and I wanna wish you success is finding the right voice for this project ...Take 1 ..(ahem) ...ONE ...(GASP) ...Sorry, again, 1, that's take one...here we go ...Aim at reading tish!"
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WillMWatt
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 20, 2014 4:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you so much, one and all! Useful input from all corners. I'll pop away and have another go. Thank you so much for taking the time to listen.

Philip - your sense of humour kills me! Smile
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