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roger
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 18, 2008 11:23 am    Post subject: When will he ever give up? Reply with quote

Never, as long as I've got a larynx in my throat, breath in me lungs and a desire to perpetuate my VO career, will I cease trying.
The latest version of my demos (works in progress). I hope they're moving in the right direction. I covet you opinions. Opine away, please.
Length? (total and cuts)
Variety?
Production values? (if any)
Proper order?
Apply to welding school?

Commercial Demo

Narration Demo

Thanks guys (includes both genders),
-roger
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 9:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Roger—

I'm getting a 404 error on the general demo.

The narration demo needs longer snippets, single sentences doesn't tell me anything about your flow.

The first sentence sounds like "Shimmering like a barrage."
Now, I'm only playing it thru my Powerbook speakers, but I have a feeling most auditioners will be doing the same.
Please don't have music for everything, it's WAY over-produced and sounds like a commercials demo.

It's OK for a narration demo to be longer than a minute. You need a bit of time to show off your ability to read different kinds of copy.

I liked your accents, it gave me the feeling you had the ability to approach different projects in a wonderful variety of ways.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 22, 2008 2:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks,DB,
The 404 error has been repaired. Thanks for the catch.
All the suggestions are most instructive and will be implemented That's why I come to the experts.
Once I've re-worked the demo, I'll be back.
Thanks again for your candor and graciousness in taking the time to listen and critique my work.
-roger
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 2:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Roger

If you can, do me a favor, recut the commercial demo in this order:

Golf Digest
Zyrtec
Podcast
To-Do
Antonios
Trail Riders
Peanut Butter

Post it and I'll get back to you.
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roger
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 5:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Peter,
As you requested: a re-ordering of the segments in my commercial demo to your specs. And I'm not doing you a favor, it's the other way round. Thanks for the interest and we will be getting back to sessions soon I hope.
Here goes:

My Commercial DemO'Connell

I know my main problem is still too much projection, announcer style reading, which I'm working on and considering a frontal lobotomy to cure.

-roger
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 7:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I listened to the Commercial Demo from the top of the thread.

Podcast. Very low quality audio. Sounds muffled and it makes YOU sound indistinct. "As a business" sounds completely slurred. Not a great script to start with anyway— it isn't as interesting as a first cut should be.

Cat Allergy. This is reminiscent of The House That Jack Built and needs a more salient rhythm to work well.

Golf Digest. Nice announcer read, but the vocal quality is identical to the previous cut.

To-do List. You should loosen up! You're way too announcery for this kind of script. It really should sound a lot more careless or off-handed— more authentic.

Trattoria. I couldn't follow the syntax as inflected, and had to listen twice to figure out what was going on. Music was too loud. A question mark in copy does not always need to be read with an upward inflection—sometimes the question is rhetorical. Many things written as questions can be read as statements.

Peanut butter. some kinda sound as the others.

I already waxed rhapsodic about the trail riders bit in the narration thread. This piece shouldn't be in both demos; it goes best in the narration demo, I do bleeb.

Roger— you need to show off your range! It's not apparent in this demo and you really have quite a bit to trot out. Bust down the walls and expand the possibilities.
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