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Philip Banks
Je Ne Sais Quoi
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 Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 10:37 am Post subject: More copy for your take |
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Below is the script for a TV commercial, the voice over must not take any longer than 19 seconds. The FX track is tyre noise in keeping with the description. Remove all the sing-sing, brightness, announcer style, energy, enthusiasm, over inflection from your voice as you are not selling, you are merely dealing with cold, hard, facts. If you want an image to help you get this sound try the following. You are standing behind someone, you speak without wishing to startle the person but they must hear and fully understand what you are about to say and you have only one chance to say it.
Believe me, it's harder than it looks. for pronunciation its "Tawse" as in paws on a dog or cat.
script 20 seconds TV
In the wet…
In the dry…
On the motorway…
About town…
Who’s looking after you and yours…?
Tawse Tyres – reassuring drivers for over 35 years. |
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Spacegypsy
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 11:16 am Post subject: |
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Hooray! "Your take.." is back! Thanks Banksey!
Here's mine...
http://tinyurl.com/lqce7 |
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Frank F
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 12:05 pm Post subject: |
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O.K., I'll give it a go... I didn't stretch this into a thirty, I thought the guys in Post could do that... so here it is, such as it is...
Frank F
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Philip Banks
Je Ne Sais Quoi
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Katrina, it's a bit too stop/start and the pitch up then ptich down is there. You need to find the rhythm in the words. Don't split the sentence with the question, Who's looking after you and yours? The end line pause after the client name is a voice over thing, when you hear the pause it's too long. Tag line for Frank need to be changed to "Mmmmmmmmmm sure do sound good to me". Don't forget the whisper "nice" before we get to the freeze. good bit of direction would be "BACK OFF!!" I made no secret of the fact that this one is a tough one. The main reason is because any voice over worth his or her salt will find it hard not to "work the copy".
Listen to the voice over and what was required to compliment the caption and pictures on a news promo'. The latter approach is what is required for the Tawse Tyres commercial.
http://thecorporatevoice.com/htv.mp3 |
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Frank F
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 12:48 pm Post subject: |
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I hear and see what you mean Banksey, I kept wanting to either keep it droll or keep punch it a bit... it is now updated...or revised... or... whatever...
ftp://ftp.xmission.com/pub/users/f/frankf/outgoing/Frank/TawseTyres.mp3
FF
Remember I am just playing in between other things, but it IS more difficult that I had expected... |
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Charlie Channel
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Spacegypsy
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Philip Banks
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 4:03 pm Post subject: |
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Suddenly the sound flattens out so the pictures, captions and FX all stand out with Katrina or Charlie as the glue that holds the pieces together.
Those able to master this style discover that all they have to do to add something to a piece is raise their eyebrows, tilt the head, gently raise a smile or shrug their shoulders ...........................
Ooooooooooh get me, MR I'm the TEACHER!!  |
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Spacegypsy
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 4:27 pm Post subject: |
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Mr. Banksey, it is very much appreciated!
Here is an apple.........  |
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Christopher French
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 6:43 pm Post subject: |
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Here's my take on Tawse Tyres.
http://www.vo-bb.com/demos/TawseTyresCGF.mp3
Any comments are welcome!!
Chris
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Hart
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Tawse Tires
Wasn't there some attempt to standardize how we named these? What was it? I forget 
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Spacegypsy
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| Posted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 7:10 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks for asking, it's TAWSyourname.MP3
Don't bother changing the ones which are already up though, I can do that when I download them, and it's not a big deal, just if folks happen to remember it would be handy  |
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nick reed
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My take on Tawse Tires
This was my first take. It's not perfect but I didn't feel like investing any more time in it. You're getting what you paid for Banksey. 
Nick |
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Philip Banks
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| Posted: Thu Mar 02, 2006 1:12 am Post subject: |
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That's what we like to see, someone who refuses to peak too soon!  |
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COURVO
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