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ConnieTerwilliger · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 5:56 pm Post subject:

Fixed - as admitted - operator error...

http://www.corporatevideo.com/images/ConnieT_ATTCallManage.mp3
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ConnieTerwilliger · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:04 pm Post subject:

Don G. · King's Row Joined: 11 Nov 2004 Posts: 1071 Location: MA

I don't know how, but I never even noticed the direction in the original post. The copy seemed to lend itself to that kind of read anyway.

Also, (in my defense), I interpreted the first line the way I did because it seemed more likely that there was an extra comma where there shouldn't have been rather than a missing period and capitalized "W". I would have definitely clarified with the director whether (s)he wanted:

Okay, hands up everyone. Whose first conversation on their new cell phone was “Hi honey, guess where I’m calling from?”

or the way I misinterpreted it

Okay, hands up everyone whose first conversation on their new cell phone was “Hi honey, guess where I’m calling from.”

It seemed to make more sense to have people raise their hands in response to a qualifier. The way it's written, everyone should raise their hands and then the qualifier is mentioned. (Yeah, yeah, I know I tend to overthink things.)

glittlefield · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:30 pm Post subject:

Drat! Curse that English Language!

(shakes angry Snoopy fist)
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ConnieTerwilliger · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:33 pm Post subject:

Frank F · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:48 pm Post subject:

To those VO-BBers who attempted this bit of dribble, "I agree with Don and Connie". I had even made the same comment to GP when he allowed me to listen to his interpretation of the commercial.

Very poorly written copy. Poor grammar, poor punctuation, poor sentence structure, too much copy, too little direction, and just too much....

The commercial in question is definitely "test market" material (i.e.: small local market).

Additionally Mike, should you wish to critique each and every respondent of this thread, consider moving your thoughts to the Critique section of the VO-BB.

Further, I might suggest you delete your critiques in this public side of the forum - this action would serve you well.

I will not dabble into critiquing your presentation of the spot, however I MUST add this comment: I do not find your critiques to be an honest review of other VO Artists skills and talent. I have read your "mini-bio" post and listened to your presentation of the Pacific Bell commercial and have my doubts you are qualified to offer an objective opinion.

Good luck.

Toodles

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Mike Sommer · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:57 pm Post subject:

It happens all the time Don. It was an interesting take. Happy accidents do sometimes happen.

And Connie

That was a delicious take. Love it, Love it, Love it.
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louzucaro · Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 10:29 pm Post subject:

Philip Banks · Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 1:56 am Post subject:

A warm up exercise for a Monday morning.

Is the script a pile of sh*te? Yes! That's why it was a good warm up exercise.

Pacific Who?

Bruce · Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 7:42 am Post subject:

A 200 word casual/conversational script? Yah, right. I've seen this before. They'll cut copy in the session until they get the sound they want. I would read it at the pace I think they want to hear and then let them figure it out if I got the gig.

Corbett on Northern Exposure was speaking at 140-150 words per minute tops. Oh, and I love how they want real casual and want you to read phrases like, "It’s Pacific Bell Information Service’s name for...".

It's a nutty business we're in.

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tackerman · Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 7:49 am Post subject:

I have nothing to add to this thread aside from the fact that my wife LOVES Northern Exposure and Corbett.

Don G. · King's Row Joined: 11 Nov 2004 Posts: 1071 Location: MA

And as long as we're venturing off on a tangent, I had the pleasure of working with John Corbett many years ago (back when he was doing the Ford spots). I was engineering the ISDN session when he was in Boston. Very nice guy.

And I don't even know why I'm bothering (except for the practice and a chance for more criticism), but here is another version I'll be happy to have picked apart.

Deirdre · Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 8:16 am Post subject:

caveat postor.
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louzucaro · Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 8:18 am Post subject:

Heh heh